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Re: A Kindly Aunt 9 & 10 - 8 years ago

Thanks for another wonderful set of chapters. The addition of Captain Wentworth was a pleasant and welcome surprise, and hopefully, they can come to a quicker and less angst filled understanding now that Anne is free from her family. I also like this more assertive Anne. She is herself, but far more confident in who she is and what she wants. I am also enjoying Jane and Elizabeth getting to kn
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Re: A Kindly Aunt 7 & 8 - 8 years ago

Thanks for another wonderful set of chapters. I enjoyed how much the sisters and Anne are doing for Mary. With attention and more self-confidence, she will grow into an even more beautiful woman. I also hope that Mr. Bennet gives more than drawing and music instruction to Kitty and Lydia. Both need firm hands and direction, and both also need the space to grow into who they are without their m
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Re: A Kindly Aunt 5 & 6 - 8 years ago

Thanks for writing this lovely story. I am enjoying your combining of Pride and Prejudice and Persuasion, as the characters blend so well together. Maybe, Mr. Bennet should think of economizing even more so that he can hire a governess for Kitty and Lydia. While he could teach them himself, I'm not certain if he'd have the patience or desire to accomplish it. I am really hoping for good matche
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Re: A Kindly Aunt - 8 years ago

This was a lovely start to a most welcome story. Anne Elliot is one of my favorite characters, and I like the more assertive and self-assured woman she is starting to become in this story. The Gardiner connection was surprising, and I hope that the Bennets will make an appearance, especially Kitty who is my favorite Bennet sister. I also hope that Mrs. Gardiner can give Anne and the Bennet sist
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Re: With Just a Little Guidance Chapter 55 and Epilogue - 9 years ago

I loved your story from start to finish, and I am a bit sad to see it end. I really enjoyed the characters, plot and dialog, and in many ways, I like your story more than the original. While the original had lively and vibrant characters, it lacked the warmth and affection that came through in your version of the Bennet family. I thoroughly enjoyed the love and respect that exists within the Be
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Re: With Just a Little Guidance Chapters 51 and 52 - 9 years ago

I am really enjoying your story. The Bennet family is so warm, welcoming and respectful, that I actually enjoy your version of the family much more than the Bennets in the original book. In fact, I prefer this version of the Bennets, because it makes the story equally as interesting as the original, without sacrificing an interesting plot or character development. I think This story is wonderfu
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Re: With Just a Little Guidance Chapters 43 and 44 - 9 years ago

This set of chapters made me extremely happy. I absolutely loved Rachel and John's courtship, and I was so happy that Mr. Bennet, who has been the father he should have been in the original book, found happiness as well. Lurinda will truly make a wonderful partner for Mr. Bennet, and as everyone likes her, she will fit perfectly into the family. These chapters were a nice conclusion to the happ
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Re: With Just a Little Guidance Chapters 41 and 42 - 9 years ago

This was a lovely set of chapters. I liked Lydia's beginning to learn adult responsibilities, and her sadness at losing her governess. I was also surprised about John and Rachel, but like the match. The conversation between Mr. Bennet, Kitty and Lydia was quite touching, and I found it interesting that you included sons as part of Mrs. Bennet's accomplishments, even if these sons are no longer
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Re: With Just a Little Guidance Chapters 37 and 38 - 9 years ago

This was a lovely set of chapters. I liked that Kitty's aunts talked with her about the difficulties she would experience married to a navy Captain. I also liked how she truly had given married life as the Captain's wife quite a bit of thought, before determining that she wanted to marry him. The captains marriage settlement was actually touching, showing just how much he cares for Kitty, even
by nastasiat - Derbyshire Writers' Guild

Re: With Just a Little Guidance Chapters 35 and 36 - 9 years ago

I'm happy that you're back, and that you had an enjoyable trip. It was wonderful to see an update to this story. I'm happy that things are going well for Kitty, but that she is considering what life might be like married to the Captain. I really hope, if you have the time and have not already written several chapters ahead, that Kitty can discuss her thoughts with several trusted family members
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Re: With Just a Little Guidance Chapters 33 and 34 - 9 years ago

This was another wonderful set of chapters. The friendship between Lydia and Georgiana was a bit surprising, but I think they will be good for each other. While Georgiana can restrain some of Lydia's more flighty characteristics, Lydia's vivaciousness can bring Georgiana out of her shell. I also like the growing friendship between Kitty and the Captain. Elizabeth did bring up an interesting po
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Re: With Just a Little Guidance Chapters 31 and 32 - 9 years ago

Thank you for another wonderful set of chapters. The introduction of Captain Fitzwilliam as a potential match for Kitty was a pleasant and welcome surprise. As my favorite Bennet sister, I am quite happy that she will make such a good match. I also like the progress between Elizabeth and Darcy. I think them becoming friends first might be the only way Darcy can prove to Elizabeth that he is fa
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Re: With Just a Little Guidance Chapters 25 and 26 - 9 years ago

This was another nice set of chapters. I wonder if Elizabeth fears becoming too close to Darcy, and this fear might be making her want to leave town. Whatever her reasons, Darcy will certainly be disappointed that his object of interest and affection has left town. I can understand Elizabeth's fears of being hurt again, as her husband chose recklessness over family and paid the ultimate price f
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Re: With Just a Little Guidance Chapters 23 and 24 - 9 years ago

"I do not need to be the center of everyone's attention. I merely need to find the right one and be his center of attention.” This is a wonderful and beautiful quote that shows the closeness and maturity of the Bennet sisters. It was made even better coming from Kitty, who is my favorite Bennet sister. I would have loved to see this version of the Bennets in the book, but your story is doing an
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Re: With Just a Little Guidance Chapters 21 and 22 - 9 years ago

This story keeps getting better and better. I was wondering how the family felt about how Jane and Elizabeth's husbands died, and you addressed my questions quite brilliantly. I also was quite thrilled by Lydia's change in attitude. Sometimes brattiness and selfishness can only be cured by seeing how one's life can be far worse, if not for their circumstances of birth. I loved how her aunts dr
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Re: With Just a Little Guidance Chapters 19 and 20 - 9 years ago

This was a really nice set of chapters. I absolutely like your version of Jane and Bingley. Both still have their sweet natures an characters, but are also more knowledgeable about the world and themselves. I also like the friends you introduced for Kitty and her aunt. It must have been quite daunting to attend a season in town, and finding true friends seams like one way of enjoying the time
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Re: With Just a Little Guidance Chapters 13 and 14 - 9 years ago

Thank you for another wonderful set of chapters. Although I miss Elizabeth and Darcy interacting and the entire Bennet family together, I am loving Kitty in this story, especially because she is my favorite Bennet sister. Even though I said something similar in a previous post, I am loving the more involved and caring Mr. Bennet and the strong maternal influence of his sister. I hope Kitty make
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Re: With Just a Little Guidance Chapters 11 and 12 - 9 years ago

Thank you for this wonderful set of chapters. I liked how Kitty covertly exposed Wickham's duplicity, and I liked that she has a good deal of common sense, without losing her zest for life. This is an excellent story so far, and I like the direction in which you are going. It is interesting to see how a more engaged Mr. Bennet and a strong maternal figure changes the story and the characters.
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Re: With Just a Little Guidance 1 and 2 - 9 years ago

An interesting start to what looks to be an enjoyable story. I like how all of the sisters have a solid relationship with each other and with their father. I also like the addition of Mr. Bennet's sister to the story. As Kitty is my favorite Bennet sister, I hope she will make a wonderful match, as nice as Jane and Elizabeth made with their first husbands and will make with their second husband
by nastasiat - Derbyshire Writers' Guild

Re: Almost Persuaded Chapters 33 and 34 - 9 years ago

I just wanted to say how much I loved your story. I have been following it from the beginning and truly liked your rich characters. I also enjoyed the large and supportive family that you created for Anne, as well as your development of Mary's character. I always thought she might have turned out better with better guidance from family. Thank you for a wonderful story, and I hope to read more
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