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Re: the braithwaite letters 22-24

Lily - not logged in
May 23, 2017 09:45PM
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All in all, I found these last chapters very sweet. Marjorie is her own self, at last, free and loved. The apple comparison was brilliant smiling smiley I didn't expect a wedding night, so I was pleasantly surprised.

As for the story being bare and sparse in places, it usually happens with epistolary novels (which is why I tend to give them a wide berth). I noticed that you added dialogue and details to later chapters, more than you did in the beginning, and I appreciated it. It did feel like the first chapters were a bit "bare", but I think it's a good way of describing the situation: Marjorie's injuries and loss of her baby, her time as Charles' guest while the evil husband was still around, the letters being smuggled to and from... I guess it must have been a blur, so if that part of the novel feels "sparse", it's just as it should be. In keeping with that trend, the happier chapters are also the richest in details and interactions.

I wish I could have seen more Charles and Marjorie falling in love, but that's a selfish, greedy reader's wishful thinking smiling smiley

Was this the last installment? You didn't write "Epilogue", so is there more? Please?
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