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Re: The Predator, the Prey, and the Protector (18th Installment)

August 16, 2018 02:19AM
Jim,

Thanks for another great chapter.

I'm really enjoying this story, including the premise which I don't believe I've ever seen before. Mike is a very endearing character and I really am hoping everything will work out soon for him and Jane.

In this chapter and possibly the previous one, I think it would allow the reader to connect even more if you'd delve a little more into what Jane is thinking and, especially, what she's feeling. She's been pulled into a world completely different from the one she knows, and now she's basically seen her life laid bare on film.

She's mentioned that it's "disconcerting" but we know Jane is very thoughtful when she speaks and may not tell what she's really feeling if she's concerned about someone else's feelings. As sweet as she is, I would still think she might experience some of the feelings that would be natural to other people in such a situation. Anger? Fear? A sense of invaded privacy? The feeling of being lost?
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The Predator, the Prey, and the Protector (18th Installment)

Jim D.August 13, 2018 09:33PM

Re: The Predator, the Prey, and the Protector (18th Installment)

Amy BethAugust 16, 2018 02:19AM

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Shannon KAugust 15, 2018 05:20AM



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