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Re: An Even Path: Post 7

August 09, 2017 06:59PM
Loved the extra scenes and especially the ending of this chapter. Will has definitely been caught: hook, line & sinker!

A couple of things I noted. I would underline them but I don't have that option on my phone:

Anne just received a 'pop tart' from Emma, and the paragraph starts: "Anne bite (bit) into the item."

And the following paragraph has some issues:
"Inside the apartment, there were hints of her everywhere. A pair of practical lace-up trainers caught Will's eye. They were muddy shoes, worn from long-distance walking. Elizabeth's shoes,t. (a broken sentence perhaps?) She didn't care what her shoes looked like. She cared about reaching her destination without hurting her feet."
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