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Re: Can I Claim For My Heart? - Chapter 23 - 6 months ago

Anne, It was wonderful to see that you updated this story. I really like how you portrayed each character as they are. The single mom who is willing to talk about her kids and is independent. Will, still a tad arrogant, but trying. You can see that he really is intrigued and likes this girl. I am very curious on where you are taking this great story. Can't wait for more Linda
by lindablanche - Derbyshire Writers' Guild

Re: Unequal Affections--Bonus Material! (do not archive) - 11 months ago

Suzanne, What a conundrum we have here. Which ending to pick? You have written two beautiful, well thought out endings. I love the other ending because Elizabeth had a chance to look at herself and become a better woman for Darcy. I also liked that she slowly realized that she loved Darcy which made sense. However, I love this ending too because it made sense too. I always wondered if it
by lindablanche - Derbyshire Writers' Guild

Re: Unequal Affections, ch 23 - 11 months ago

Suzanne, What a delightful and lovely chapter. It was wonderful how Darcy and Elizabeth both wanted to be the best for the other. That was exactly what I was looking for. I loved how she did not tell him that she loved him right away. She told him that she thought she may be in love. It felt right that her feelings would not change that fast. When the moment was right, she made him the happ
by lindablanche - Derbyshire Writers' Guild

Re: Unequal Affections, ch 22 - 11 months ago

Suzanne, That was masterful. You know that I have been waiting for this chapter, and you delivered. Elizabeth looked within and realize that she needed to come off of her high horse. Wonderful. I loved how she looked at the past with the Wickham and the colonel also and compared them to Darcy. She looked at how she had been treating Darcy since he arrived. That was what I wanted-some intros
by lindablanche - Derbyshire Writers' Guild

Re: Manners vs neglect - 11 months ago

I am not sure that she continued to believe that he was disagreeable. As matter of fact, when she returns from Rosings, she remarks to Wickham that "Darcy improves on acquaintance". At this point, she had never seen the new Darcy. So I think it was only her views of Darcy that had changed at this point. I think she was remarking that she was astonished about what Mrs. Reynolds said was becaus
by lindablanche - Tea Room

Re: Manners vs neglect - 11 months ago

But I do not believe that it his manners were the problem. They just added to it. Let me tell why I believe that. When she read the letter, she immediately saw Darcy's side and saw why he would act the way he did. Even with reference to Jane and Bingley, she remembered that Charlotte had said the exact to her at the party. Darcy has not change, at this point. Now Elizabeth was regreting h
by lindablanche - Tea Room

Re: I guess I am still unmoved also.-Thank you - 11 months ago

You meant we have agreed all along. That is fantastic. Though I have to say that I am glad that I did not know before, I have enjoyed sparring with you. Thank you Linda
by lindablanche - Derbyshire Writers' Guild

Thank you - 11 months ago

Thank you, Suzanne. I am glad that you have given me this information. I think when this story is done. I will reread and using what I now know, see if I get a different perception. Please, do not take any of my comments as criticism. I truly love your story. I would never comment as much as I do if I hated it. I have a bad tendency to comment like I would want someone to comment on my sto
by lindablanche - Derbyshire Writers' Guild

I guess I am still unmoved also. - 11 months ago

Explain to me if it is OK for Elizabeth to speak the truth about Darcy to her friend. Why is it not OK for Darcy to do the same with his. Darcy spoke that famous line to His friend, not to Elizabeth herself. I have read chapter upon chapter, where Darcy looks at his behaviour and changes. What is Elizabeth doing to become a better woman for Darcy. He is simply rude and arrogant, not a mas
by lindablanche - Derbyshire Writers' Guild

Re: Not to be tediously argumentative, but... - 11 months ago

I agree with everything you said except this comment. "By contrast, Bingley's biggest mistake was listening to Darcy" Bingley's biggest mistake was not trusting Jane or himself. He had what I would call-no conviction. I would actually call it no 'something else' but this is a PG site. I think Bingley was more guilty than Darcy in leaving in a way. Darcy thinks he is falling in love and it
by lindablanche - Derbyshire Writers' Guild

Re: you know that quote's from this week, right? - 11 months ago

I agree with Pam. It didn't seem like enough. Darcy has been wallow in self reproach and has for chapter after chapter. Elizabeth just says she sorry. It almost feels like she is more worried about him not marrying her and ruining her family than actually looking within herself. Sorry! Just my opinion Linda Suzanne, don't hate me. I truly love your story.
by lindablanche - Derbyshire Writers' Guild

Re: About time - 11 months ago

I am so glad. Thank you
by lindablanche - Derbyshire Writers' Guild

Re: About time - 11 months ago

I agree with you Pam that Darcy needed to know this, but what irritates me is that Darcy once again is looking at his behaviour. He has done this before, and has made correction to become a much better man. We have seen Darcy in chapter after chapter. Come out of his comfort zone and work to be worthy of Elizabeth. My question is when is Elizabeth going to look at how she speaks about people
by lindablanche - Derbyshire Writers' Guild

Re: Unequal Affections, ch 19 - 1 year ago

Suzanne, You have to love Jane and her goodness. She thinks so well of everyone including Wickham and Lydia. “I thought as much. I always believed that your dislike of him would vanish if you but knew him to be in your power.” That is a rough line to come from your best friend. Sadly, it is true, no matter how Elizabeth tries to contradict it. I hope she is able to reassure Darcy soon. He f
by lindablanche - Derbyshire Writers' Guild

Re: In Defense of a Most Beloved Sister, Ch. 7 - 1 year ago

Tanya, I am a little confuse by Darcy's motivation. Why bother to introduce his sister to Elizabeth if he is engaged to Anne? Why try to be more than an acquaitance with Elizabeth? He does not have to be. I would have thought that simply sending Bingley on his way to Jane would have been easier than pushing for a stronger relationship with Elizabeth. It is troublesome that Anne was on the
by lindablanche - Derbyshire Writers' Guild

Re: Strong and opposing feelings - 1 year ago

Oh but that is what I love about this thread. People trying to change the other's person mind. I do not believe it can happen as well, but I do believe that you can see their point of view. Often being very different than your own. You can learn something new about what people want and see in a story. But this can only happen when two very important things happen. 1 the site allows people
by lindablanche - Derbyshire Writers' Guild

Re: Unequal Affections, ch 14 - 1 year ago

Suzanne, Bad behaviour on both sides in this chapter. The breakfast scene is a perfect example. Darcy should have taken a moment to sit with the family. It would not have been hard, and would have gone a long way in easing the relationships. Elizabeth should have given Darcy her attention when he arrived. The one joy of his lonely life at Netherfield is that he gets to see Elizabeth once a d
by lindablanche - Derbyshire Writers' Guild

Re: Unequal Affections, ch 13 - 1 year ago

Suzanne, Oh boy, I have mixed feelings about this chapter. I love that Darcy was willing to do anything to help Elizabeth convince her father that Lydia should stay home. I really loved his motivation, not so much his methods. I am not sure that it was a great way to march into his future father-in-laws office and offered to raise his daughters' dowry to keep Lydia home. It came across as a l
by lindablanche - Derbyshire Writers' Guild

Re: An engaging discussion... ;) - 1 year ago

I agree with you, Fay. Elizabeth intends to be a good wife including having children and trying to make Darcy happy. Whatever the reasons, she is accepting him in the first place. I think it is the intent in the story that makes it OK. If she was like Caroline who only wanted his money and name and didn't care about how he was feeling. That would be different.
by lindablanche - Tea Room

Re: to marry or not to marry... the ethics of 19th century marriages - 1 year ago

I think that Bingley lack confidence. The one thing I would think the intelligent, outspoken person like Elizabeth would need is a confidence person in his views. I never see Bingley as that.
by lindablanche - Tea Room

Re: Unequal Affections, ch 12 - 1 year ago

Suzanne, You mean tears of joy or tears because we are so overwhelmed with the beauty of their love. Right. I hope you are not planning to kill Darcy or Elizabeth. I hope you would not do this to us. I have so falling in love with your imperfect D and E. Linda
by lindablanche - Derbyshire Writers' Guild

Re: Unequal Affections, ch 12 - 1 year ago

Suzanne, Thank you for reminding us what date the characters are in. I think since we have been reading it for the last 12 weeks. We forget that the characters have not been betrothed that long. I know that I did. It help me put alot into perspective. Wickham, that sneaky boy, I wonder what he is upto. I am glad that Elizabeth is getting a small sense that he is up to something as well. Th
by lindablanche - Derbyshire Writers' Guild

Re: Unequal Affections, ch 11 - 1 year ago

Suzanne, I felt that you stuff this chapter with a lot. We started with the private conversation with Wickham. I am not saying that she was wrong in her walking with him, but certainly she can't expect that Darcy will never find out about it. Considering the history between the men, I am surprised that Wickham did not approach Darcy, and tell him the wonderful time he has been having with his f
by lindablanche - Derbyshire Writers' Guild

Re: Plot bunny - 1 year ago

Mallory, Why don't you write this story? I think it would be an excellent story if you change the setting. You need to keep the Bennets away from Darcy for much of the story. Otherwise, Darcy would have already known how Mrs. Bennet is already. Maybe her and Jane are in London at the Gardiners or away somewhere but Darcy can't meet Mrs. Bennet until the right time. I think your story you ar
by lindablanche - Derbyshire Writers' Guild

Re: Unequal Affections, ch 10 - 1 year ago

Suzanne, This is what I am talking about. This is what I have been waiting for. I know that nothing is fixed, but they are both trying to the best of their ability. I know that Elizabeth does not love Darcy. I am OK with it for now. I know that Darcy can be arrogant sometimes. I can deal with that. It is going to be baby steps with this couple, but at least in this chapter there were some
by lindablanche - Derbyshire Writers' Guild

You did not give me any encouragement sb title of the chapter - 1 year ago

Hi Suzanne, I found everyone a mess in this chapter. I am not sure that Mr. Bennet was really welcoming when he sat and read his book while Darcy was talking to him about marrying his daughter. Not exactly encouraging. Though in Mr. Bennet's defense, there was one minor thing he did right. That was to invite him to his sanctuary. To Mr. Bennet that was like a compliment, probably about the b
by lindablanche - Derbyshire Writers' Guild

Re: Unequal Affections, ch 8 - 1 year ago

I feel the need to defend our boy, Darcy. Canon Darcy was a great catch even when he was a arrogant. He would have provided for her, made sure that she had everything she wanted including his love. Even today pride is no reason not to marry a man, otherwise there would be a great deal of men without wives.-including many politician, celeb, businessman, athletes. I have to say I find it in
by lindablanche - Derbyshire Writers' Guild

Re: Unequal Affections, ch 7 - 1 year ago

Suzanne, Another beautifully written chapter. I really liked how Darcy called Elizabeth on her behaviour at the party. He knew exactly what she was doing with Miss Bingley. It was petty of her. I wished she had realized it. He loved seeing her stand out amongst his group. She unfortunately went and ruined his evening. He has watched her for so long that of course he knew that she was sec
by lindablanche - Derbyshire Writers' Guild

Re: Unequal Affections, ch 6 - 1 year ago

Suzanne, You are doing such a beautiful job of conveying the misunderstandings that still plague our couple. Being new to courting and still not quite completely understanding each other, often there would be misunderstandings. I am glad that they are giving each other the benefit of the doubt instead of fighting. They are trying to listen to each other even if they still don't get each other.
by lindablanche - Derbyshire Writers' Guild

Re: "Pretty Woman" Vn Darcy's Proposal-Chp 11 - 1 year ago

The man has a right to know what he wants, but what about the woman. I don't think that Elizabeth wants him. She is finding a way to get out of it gently.
by lindablanche - Derbyshire Writers' Guild
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